The Descent

Mauntgomery · Post by **Mauntgomery** » Fri Oct 22, 2004 4:57 pm

Mauntgomery · Post by **Mauntgomery** » Fri Oct 22, 2004 4:59 pm

Mauntgomery · Post by **Mauntgomery** » Fri Oct 22, 2004 4:59 pm

Kazer0 · Post by **Kazer0** » Fri Oct 22, 2004 7:08 pm

That's all I read when I skimmed, and noticed you made a common over-word use error. Try synonyms for man, or even give them names even if they aren't main characters.

Mauntgomery · Post by **Mauntgomery** » Sat Oct 23, 2004 2:12 pm

Da_Goat · Post by **Da_Goat** » Fri Oct 29, 2004 11:10 pm

Psst...if you want to publish this, I'd be hesitant about posting a whole chapter on the internet. Generally, posting on the internet is seen as a form of publishing, and most companies aren't willing to publish a book - in full or in part - that's been published elsewhere. Most sites and publishers stick to a rule of 13 lines posted, and the rest read via email.

But it's your story, so do what you want.